On Thu, Nov 17, 2016 at 3:12 PM, Salazar, Christina <
christina.salazar_at_csuci.edu> wrote:
> I do think it's too long. I actually think we could cut it to the last
> paragraph and leave it at that.
>
> I also think that the opening paragraph makes it look as though we're
> apologizing for restating our own values. While it might be useful to
> contextualize by saying something like "In light of recent events..."
>
>
Agreed -- I think the last sentence could also be cut. Shortening it gives
the words more force.
Values should be timeless, so I believe it's best to avoid framing the
statement in a time-bound context.
kyle
Received on Fri Nov 18 2016 - 09:01:47 EST