On Fri, Jan 26, 2007 at 10:45:37AM -0500, Ben Ostrowsky wrote:
> Well, if it's open for a rewrite, perhaps something like:
>
> It was hopeless. Maude and Agnes had cracked top-secret
> messages during World War II, but even Bletchley Park's
> finest cryptographers were mystified by the enigmatic "008".
>
> At the risk of dissecting frogs, I think it telegraphs the context and
> puts the punchline where it belongs: at the end. It also breaks well
> into three lines.
>
> Ben
>
Maybe it could be tightened down a little:
It was hopeless. Maude and Agnes, Bletchley Park's finest
cryptographers, were still mystified by the enigmatic "008".
I think that conveys the sense that they're capable, but doesn't turn
into a history lesson.
Gabe
Received on Fri Jan 26 2007 - 12:47:36 EST